Hello there! We'd like to see some revisions on your application before we go ahead and make a decision.
First of all, we feel as though the abilities section is insufficient. Because of David's potential for developing new power spontaneously, we would like to see this explained more thoroughly. How do you plan on playing this out in Paradisa? Will he spontaneously develop powers, or will you be sticking to those that are present in canon? Please explain this mechanic further so we know what to expect and if we need to put nerfing/power restrictions in place to keep him from doing anything potentially gamebreaking.
Secondly, we would like to see a deeper analysis of his personality, particularly in regards to his psychology. You mentioned briefly that he has DID and lacks self confidence, but only in passing; because his condition is so integral to his character, we would like to see his complexities further explained to ensure you have a strong grasp on his characterization.
Please return your revisions within 72 hours. Thank you!
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First of all, we feel as though the abilities section is insufficient. Because of David's potential for developing new power spontaneously, we would like to see this explained more thoroughly. How do you plan on playing this out in Paradisa? Will he spontaneously develop powers, or will you be sticking to those that are present in canon? Please explain this mechanic further so we know what to expect and if we need to put nerfing/power restrictions in place to keep him from doing anything potentially gamebreaking.
Secondly, we would like to see a deeper analysis of his personality, particularly in regards to his psychology. You mentioned briefly that he has DID and lacks self confidence, but only in passing; because his condition is so integral to his character, we would like to see his complexities further explained to ensure you have a strong grasp on his characterization.
Please return your revisions within 72 hours. Thank you!