We're sorry, but we are declining your application. Your third- and first-person journal samples both do not meet our standards, in that we do not hear his voice in either of them and the third-person sample in particular strikes us as being OOC. Your personality section also has headcanon to an excessive amount, and your proposed loss is insufficient as well.

Since asking for revisions on all of these sections would require in essence an entirely new application, we are choosing to decline instead.

Thank you for your interest in Paradisa. You may re-apply for this character or apply for a different character at any time.